One thing that’s good is that you use an example from your life. But it needs to be better connected to your main idea.
Could burning your hand have become bad adult behavior? to pay attention to children to stop them from developing bad behavior that will follow them into adulthood.
Candidates for the GED tests are individuals who have not earned a high school diploma.
The GED Tests are standardized regularly by testing a sample of graduating high school seniors.
This standardization process sets the benchmark that candidates must achieve to earn a GED credential.
Currently, students pass the tests by achieving a GED score higher than the top 60 percent of graduating high school seniors.
Did adults’ good advice stop you from developing behavior that would hurt you as an adult? I think the idea for the conclusion is good, but that it could be more clearly stated.
The details that you give in the essay are specific bad things children might do, and the story from your own life about burning your hand.
If you follow the specific example through, it’s easier for the reader to see what you mean. You might look at the organization lessons in the GED Academy course online to brush up on how to organize your essay. You start by asking a question, which is a good way to start.
The more interesting you can make the question, the better…